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Jul 11, 2024 at 7:23pm
In response to "My cat rests on my pillow"

This is why you need two pillows

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Or to put it another way... a wise cat always provides an extra pillow for their servant.

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Wordsmitty ✍️

Jul 11, 2024 at 7:13pm
In response to "My cat rests on my pillow"

So true. ( It's really the cat's pillow.

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D Spirit writer 🎶😺

Jun 22, 2024 at 12:17pm
In response to "Wish for Summer Snow"

Yikes Kare that's quite a big change 😲.

To respond to the blog, I enjoyed your descriptions and contrast of the seasons!
Very nice 🙂👍 and caught my eye. Write ✍️ on!

Kåre Enga in Montana

Jun 21, 2024 at 3:18pm
In response to "I'll Scream within my Dream"

Time to consider entering this or one of your other recent poems into Poetic Traditions (as you have before).

Nicely done.

Kåre Enga in Montana

Jun 21, 2024 at 1:21pm
In response to "Wish for Summer Snow"

I went from 108 to 35 when I came back to Montana. And yes, it snowed; but, now the heat will finally settle in at the end of June. Oh, how we suffer.

At least in Thailand we had a/c. I will wilt next week.

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Vanishing Vapor

Dec 17, 2023 at 5:42pm
In response to "Hindsight"

If Christianity is true, would you like to know?

Kåre Enga in Montana

Dec 17, 2023 at 12:58am
In response to "Hindsight"

My body will feed the worms; my soul will return to its Source.

I'm not Christian so I look at things differently than most folks here at WDC.

Kåre Enga in Montana

Nov 19, 2023 at 9:09am
In response to "Temptation"

Wonderful rhythm and rhyme. It rolls... And yes, spiders need to eat too. They know where to dine... or they starve.

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Kåre Enga in Montana

Oct 29, 2023 at 1:19am
In response to "Kidder"

I really like this as is but I share some thoughts:

Now go the hell away. Very good use of this line. I'd make it the title unless a specific event or place comes to mind. Like "Workshop, May 32nd, Highway-to-Hell, Nevada".

I'd find active verbs for each use of 'is' and replace each 'the'. Like "May's sky screams blue; Spring's sea blooms green". This provides a season and action, sound, something.

Could use a grammar check unless you like it as is. Grammar is less important in poetry; this isn't an essay. For a definite pause (like for rhythm) you can use an emdash instead of a comma like: "I kid you not — nature's obscene,"

To add "darkness" to it... this is that season...

Explorers with lost souls explore,
Search worlds they've never searched before,
They'll kid you not — forevermore,
Now go the hell away.

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Vanishing Vapor

Aug 11, 2023 at 12:30pm
In response to "The Lighthouse of Whispers"

Whispers the names of all that suffered because of one's bad choices so that pain is returned.

April 23, 2020 at 6:27pm

#981859

Balwo #3

Wondering what's wrong, I couldn't see,
Why I lusted for my female cousin,
Until on the day I turned forty-three,
I overheard a strange rumor buzzin',
That my parents had secretly adopted me,
And their eggs, not mine, were short of a dozen.

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April 23, 2020 at 6:12pm

#981855

Balwo #2

My first love offered her virginity,
But I fearfully declined,
Not wanting to spoil her purity,
So she gave away what was mine.
Now, as I lie here dying,
It's for this I'm still crying.

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April 23, 2020 at 5:58pm

#981853

Balwo #1

She tortures me from distant memory,
Her bright eyes smiling at passing men,
I sat like a dog and worshipped her beauty,
I'll die, having never known her true love.

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April 23, 2020 at 2:53pm

#981837

Say #1

A lit candle is a pain in the butt.

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April 23, 2020 at 12:21pm

#981823

Piece of Artwork

Hahaha! Gobblety Gook! My aces were not flying as high as they should, so I radioed the flight commander and requested an ice cream and Oreo sundae. When it arrived the squadron did also. That's when the puppies hit the flagstaff! I made sure every one of those pilots knew that I'd had enough ice cream to fill a bloated midget, and that's a lot of ice cream!
Now on to more important matters. I've just finished combing the lawn and I need a shower!

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