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Jul 11, 2024 at 7:23pm
In response to "My cat rests on my pillow"

This is why you need two pillows

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Or to put it another way... a wise cat always provides an extra pillow for their servant.

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Wordsmitty ✍️

Jul 11, 2024 at 7:13pm
In response to "My cat rests on my pillow"

So true. ( It's really the cat's pillow.

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Spirit🍁🍂Writer

Jun 22, 2024 at 12:17pm
In response to "Wish for Summer Snow"

Yikes Kare that's quite a big change 😲.

To respond to the blog, I enjoyed your descriptions and contrast of the seasons!
Very nice 🙂👍 and caught my eye. Write ✍️ on!

Kåre เลียม Enga

Jun 21, 2024 at 3:18pm
In response to "I'll Scream within my Dream"

Time to consider entering this or one of your other recent poems into Poetic Traditions (as you have before).

Nicely done.

Kåre เลียม Enga

Jun 21, 2024 at 1:21pm
In response to "Wish for Summer Snow"

I went from 108 to 35 when I came back to Montana. And yes, it snowed; but, now the heat will finally settle in at the end of June. Oh, how we suffer.

At least in Thailand we had a/c. I will wilt next week.

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Vanishing Vapor

Dec 17, 2023 at 5:42pm
In response to "Hindsight"

If Christianity is true, would you like to know?

Kåre เลียม Enga

Dec 17, 2023 at 12:58am
In response to "Hindsight"

My body will feed the worms; my soul will return to its Source.

I'm not Christian so I look at things differently than most folks here at WDC.

Kåre เลียม Enga

Nov 19, 2023 at 9:09am
In response to "Temptation"

Wonderful rhythm and rhyme. It rolls... And yes, spiders need to eat too. They know where to dine... or they starve.

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Kåre เลียม Enga

Oct 29, 2023 at 1:19am
In response to "Kidder"

I really like this as is but I share some thoughts:

Now go the hell away. Very good use of this line. I'd make it the title unless a specific event or place comes to mind. Like "Workshop, May 32nd, Highway-to-Hell, Nevada".

I'd find active verbs for each use of 'is' and replace each 'the'. Like "May's sky screams blue; Spring's sea blooms green". This provides a season and action, sound, something.

Could use a grammar check unless you like it as is. Grammar is less important in poetry; this isn't an essay. For a definite pause (like for rhythm) you can use an emdash instead of a comma like: "I kid you not — nature's obscene,"

To add "darkness" to it... this is that season...

Explorers with lost souls explore,
Search worlds they've never searched before,
They'll kid you not — forevermore,
Now go the hell away.

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Vanishing Vapor

Aug 11, 2023 at 12:30pm
In response to "The Lighthouse of Whispers"

Whispers the names of all that suffered because of one's bad choices so that pain is returned.

July 18, 2022 at 5:07am

#1035342

Food for Thought

What if stark reality
were like a movie show
moving frames of universe
how would we even know
sixty times a second
each frame a new creation
complete with memories
within each incarnation

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July 15, 2022 at 12:41pm

#1035238

Dig it!

>>>>>FAIL<<<<<

Simple things for simple minds
Might not be simple at all
For each of those simple things
In concentration
Upon reflection
Brings deeper insight

Cooking an egg could create
An image of great damage
That results in a blessing
Resting on a starving plate.

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July 5, 2022 at 2:16pm

#1034731

My Portal

This portal of glass and brass
transparent as smoke from a gasoline fire
provides little view to a monstrous world
of slippery slimy vipers
stalking with lust for savory souls
lost to oblivion.

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July 4, 2022 at 4:52pm

#1034697

Prickly Pear

I dare
my soul to bare
to put it all out there
so be aware
how little I care
about what I wear
let everybody stare
if I dress with flair
or grow my hair
this I swear
if you I scare
say a prayer
don't compare
my derriere
to some laissez-faire
jerk in despair.

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July 3, 2022 at 1:15pm

#1034647

Tip

"It is" sounds good to me,
Be sure to add an apostrophe.

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