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My name is Joy, and I love to write. Why poetry, here? Because poetry uplifts its writer, and if she is lucky enough, her readers, too. Around us, so many objects abound to write about. Once a poet starts with a smallest, most trivial object, he shall discover that his pen will spill out what is most delicate or most majestic hidden inside him. Since the classics sometimes dealt with lofty subjects with a lofty language, a person with poetry in his soul may incline to emulate that. That is understandable. Poetry does that to a person: it enlarges the soul and gives it wings. Yet, to really soar, a poet needs to take off from the ground. Kiya's gift. I love it!
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Jan 17, 2006 at 12:11am
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Re: Prompt 11
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Airycat, actually the premise of the poem is wonderful, and I can relate to it, because the city I grew up in looks like a different place also.
What I am feeling is, you want to emphasize the grayness of the city, in color and in meaning. I suggest, instead of repeating the word gray, find several different "gray" words or concepts.
For example:
"St. Mary's looming grayly"
-St. Mary's, a looming giant slate,- etc.

It is actually a good poem, I think. Once you finish it, it will be a gem. *Smile*





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Prompt 11 · 01-16-06 11:21pm
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