Ok, so after reviewing my story, I have to step back my comments some. I do have a few of apostrophes in the dialog. Anyway, here is the story:

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This is what inspired the story: NIGHT HUNTING FOR VARMINTS - An enlightening experience   I seem to recall some disturbing descriptions and images following links around.

I plan to revisit this after the NaNo challenge, because it was one of my favorite stories. The 1000 word limit handcuffed me, and I want to improve the descriptions of events, making some of what was happening more clear. A proper ending is also needed. I have a few ideas but the truly satisfying finale eludes me.