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Oct 1, 2017 at 5:45pm
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You're switching points of view, LinnAnn -Book writer ![]() How NOT to do it would be to switch back and forth within one paragraph. This excerpt doesn't tell us what happens before or after. Is the first person POV consistent throughout the entire narration? Then a one-paragraph switch to third person could be jarring. In that case, consider, instead of narrating Eli's actions and words while she is asleep, perhaps integrating them into a part of a dream that she has, or, alternatively, have him tell her later. On the other hand, if you've switched POVs on a pretty regular basis, just keep it as is. (The above is my take on it. Other people will have other ideas, and that's great. In the end, do what works for you.) |
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