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Oct 19, 2017 at 6:53pm
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I know you asked Brandiwynš¶ , but I had a second to check in. I think you have a great deal going on in there, probably enough for a good length novel. However, I think you might want to rethink some names. Lucy, Lesley, and Lincoln will be completely confused in my head if you're not careful. If you want an example from published works: Divergent has characters Tris and Tobias who can be quite confusing. I wish she'd left the one referred to only as 'Four' if only for clarity. |
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