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Oct 9, 2023 at 12:05am
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Hallo, Shadow Prowler-Spreading Love . This is just a bare scene as one writes it in a short amount of time like the two days of contest. So don't worry about that. The basic conflict is strong: two brothers thinking their handicapped sister is an incapable (physical!) vegetable. I honestly wanted to slap the two poopheads, and cheered for Sabrandra (dude, stumbled over that name.). A feisty gal, not letting herself down because of her challenges. You created quite an impressive character I easily rooted for. Usually, I'm sensitive about mothers because my own was a poophead, too, but you don't talk bad about deceased people, sorry. I LOVED Valerie, and wished my Mom was a bit like her. I think you might like my MMC, Vince's, Mum, Shona. She's a Scot, and a true Lady (her father's a Lord), but decided during her year abroad to stay in New York with Vince's Dad, Vincenzo, and to marry him and become a teacher, her secret dream. If you like, in "~7~ How did you know, Dad? (Protagonist Background)" Vince's dad tells about how they met, and it helps Vince resolve a problem. |
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Didn't Turn Out So Well... · 10-08-23 8:56pm
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Re: Didn't Turn Out So Well... · 10-09-23 12:05am
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