Hello Jeff  ,
My Thoughts:
This was a fun story, where we were able to fall easily into the lives of these two friends. You were able to give us a lot of good back story without doing any information dumps, and we got a clear view of all the characters.
My Favorite Part:
My favorite part was how the memory made me feel. It was like being a little kid again after my mother finished baking cookies, my friend and I would steal one and run down the hall to hide around the corner, all the while giggling at our small crime.
My Suggestions:
Quick edit: 'who came out and screamed at their in Italian. Their should be them.
Thank you,
~Noyoki
Write On!!
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 You responded to this review 02/15/2013 @ 3:03pm EST |
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