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About This Author
 Writing poetry allows me to exercise my imagination and share it with others. I strive to write for the benefit of the reader using carnival fun mirror images of my life's experiences.
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 Review #4237783 |
 |  | Blest Love  [E] It's what your life's about.  |
| I am trying to understand this poem, and maybe it isn't meant to be understood. The first stanza is about the butterflies and how they live their life not worrying about who is looking at them. Even though we enjoy their colors and beauty. The second stanza is about the birds and their songs being sung without a care as to who is listening. The mountain's peak just stands there still while we gaze at it's freedom and majesty. The breeze blows moving to it's own pace not knowing who is feeling it. Then comes the last stanza, after looking in a thesaurus at the word 'austere'. The piece finally fell into place. This piece is essentially about taking a step back and looking at your situation from a larger picture. Whew! That's what I got out of this poem. I like it. Once I broke it down it made sense. For me it does not flow off the tongue completely well. I had problems reading stanza 2 line 3, 'the' for some reason it doesn't fit to me in the sentence. Stanza 3 you might look at changing 'plays' to playing, maybe. I personally live in the middle of the US so I don't get a sweet salty ocean breeze. I understand the breeze plays through the tops of the trees. This is a good poem and I like it. I like the way you wrote it with each rhyming word ending the line. Thank you for writing. 
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