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Given: Jul 16, 2016 at 8:48am
Length: 1,141 Characters |
1,113 w/o WritingML
A review for the House of GreyJoy
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First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This review is being done as part of the Game of Thrones contest.
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
The story tells of some desert people who have to travel some distance to even get wood. This sci/fi adventure drops immediately into a conflict. It rests mostly on the relationship of two friends.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Targh D'yer and his friend Sinbe have traveled to the wood supply to bring back wood for a celebration of the marriage of the Headman's daughter. Upon returning instead of a celebration they find thier little town as been attacked by some strange half man half spider. Targh's friend Sinbe is killed while slaying the creature.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
A little more background is necessary.
FINAL THOUGHTS:
This is a good beginning. You should expand it. Well done.
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