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This one showed up on Random Reads.
I see you wrote / modified it a long time ago. Your brief description indicates it's a work in progress ...?

You've left the 'genre' at 'other' -- maybe pick up to three genres, so that this shows up on searches?

You tell the story well, and the rhyme scheme and verse structure work to give your message. In a couple of places, I thought the rhyme was a bit forced, like the last line of the second verse. Also, the first two lines of the third verse deviate from the rhyme scheme a bit.

Basically, a tale of sorrow, told succinctly while capturing the emotions.

Write On!
Sonali

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