Happy Anniversary Month Gervic! Thanks for all you be and do to make WDC Shine! 
I am happy to review to celebrate you. 
Oh my gosh! I loved this expression and admire your talent in creating the form. Wow!
It also fits the theme of Sidewalk poems as each couplet could each represent a sidewalk square. How ingenius.
The contrasting images of winter leaving and spring coming are vibrant and easy to imagine as your descriptions are specific to each element of the season. Your word choice is eloquent and I like the bits of personification in the wintertime expressions of the plants and trees. Active verbs make it come alive. I liked the idea of all the chatting nature does in the winter...as what else is there to do. Then in your spring verses, longer descriptions of activity in a narrative voice suggests that all is too busy for idle chatter.
Your created format is consistent and interesting with its alternate rhyming couplets and the mini titles that carry main idea for each couplet gives an extra emphasis to the element that is described. An original notion. I can imagine it took some time and effort to get it right!
Reading the poem aloud was pleasant. Good use of rhyme, assonance and consonance with bits of alliteration and personification added to the flow. I did not notice a specific rhythm scheme and that gives it a changing flow much like the seasons. Shorter lines for winter suggests sparseness and quiet while the longer lines in the springtime verse indicate growth, activity and liveliness. It adds to the contrast element of the form.
Interesting new word "sheet". Thanks for the definition.
The opening line with a vivid image of "motes of sparkling dust" drew my attention and sparked my imagination! I so enjoyed entering this vision. Thanks for sharing your gift. This poem deserves it's own static item as you created a form more folks might like to see.
Keep on writing, poet master!
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