Wow! This poem really does play the opposites as the prompt dictates and you have captured the crisis of the pandemic in a realistic way with lots of detail. The feelings about the crisis are clear as well and it was awesome to see the benefits as well as the detriments. There always are polarities if we but see them. I like how you bring out the varying ideas like government plot, fate, a lesson to be learned by humanity etc. The last line made me smile as it would indeed be a strong positive effect of the crisis. Love rocks!

The form was effective for the potency of the expression. Awesome rhymes and use of assonance and consonance assisted the flow and soundscape in the absence of a steady rhythm count. The freer style here allowed for descriptive detail that expanded out vision of the crisis. I can imagine the effort it took to get this whipped into a pleasing read.

A few minor glitches I noticed:
In "Everything had changed from the way it's been" I think "It's" should be "it'd" for it had...in keeping with the tense of the previous lines.

In "And wore a face shield" "wore" should be "wear".

I would drop the word "or" and just begin with "The authorities" and put a comma after "jail" to connect with the next line. Also I think "handcuffs" should be "handcuffed".

I wonder if "at a certain percent(age)?" needs to be "to a certain.."

The line "Is it all the worst, a feeling that you're losing your strife?" could be revised for flow. I was a bit thrown off.

I loved the image of the family being together and the idea of the "too busy father" now joking. Ending on a happy note was appealing too.

Thanks for sharing your vivid vision on the Covid phenomenon presenting those opposing points of view for readers to consider. The voice and tone were clear and the theme relevant. Awesome creation!



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