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Given: Mar 23, 2024 at 5:21pm
Length: 1,427 Characters |
1,338 w/o WritingML
Greetings!
Ah, this was really good. I quite enjoyed reading it, though I was half expecting it to include the actual moment of the sky dive. But there’s a word limit, and the point is to highlight the three perspectives in a memorable way.
You handled it perfectly, with the three main characters each having a distinct and unique voice that shines in the allotted moments. The order of POVs is arranged well, beginning with your own sense of unease and panic and ending on an amusing note with the pilot’s view of how absurd you and the entire situation must have appeared to him. The details mesh perfectly as well; from person to person it all matches up and fills in the picture.
Your formatting is good, with font size larger than default and easy to read. I noticed two super minor typos: “Yeh, This place…” in the granddaughter’s dialogue has a capitalization error, and the word “hangers” in your dialogue should be “hangars,” for planes. Other than that, I think it’s a winner
If you need sectional word counts, you can access them on your Word file by selecting the desired text chunk (you know: select, copy, paste…) and then checking the word count; it will break down the count and include the portion you’ve selected.
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