Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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This was an amusing and quick paced read, as we hurry to discover the consequences of Rusty’s bad behavior. He learned a good lesson there, or at least we would hope he did. I like how you’ve added real Gaelic snippets and translated them for us, it adds atmosphere and style. I’ve learned what a Shillelagh is too. Story-wise I don’t have any real suggestions to make; you’ve told it with a good balance of showing and narrative, and we get a breath of smelly Irish bar air as we read    Congrats on the shiny green award icon 
As a newbie I’ve learned the basics of formatting quite rapidly: size 4 Verdana font, a word count in the subtitle, and a dropnote with any prompt or other contest info at the bottom. These little things contribute to a more polished item and a read that’s comfortable on any device. Word counts are necessary for entering contests, and it’s good to develop the habit even when it’s not needed, so when the time comes you do actually remember to include it.
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