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Bleh, the desperation of the desire for freedom. Vividly painted in harsh scenes I’d rather forget as quickly as possible, I’m glad it was only flash fiction. You’ve done your job well, making a vaguely GoT flavored item that could just as well be anything else.
What can I say? You’ve encapsulated everything in a fleeting, memorable snapshot. I call to mind Max Griffin’s favorite formula of goals, stakes, and obstacles, and I can quickly see that all three of them are laid out here, however briefly. The resolution is quick and hopeless, and there’s no need to drag it out any further.
A good job using the prompt phrase, and I like that you remembered to add it in at the bottom. Do you ever go back to a flash fiction and add to it, or take the idea you’ve made and use it in a longer work? One can perhaps use these somewhat annoying flash fiction challenges as a way to collect ideas for bigger stories or even novel concepts. One could make a collection of ideas that way. The prompt phrases are usually vague enough to allow a lot of room for things you may already have in mind.
Thanks for sharing and have fun!
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