Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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Oh, this was cute and fun. I love how you drew in the other members of your team without actually tagging them. It’s always good to have a bunch of names you can use for characters.
Your vivid descriptions bring the story to life as we excitedly read through to see whether it becomes a disaster or a success. They arrive alive, without the treasure they had hoped to confiscate, but with a valuable lesson and a story to tell.
I appreciate the large clear font you’ve used, and I have no suggestions for improvement. You made a perfect little story using the prompt phrase. I love how everyone has managed to come up with stories that are almost the same basic themes, but at the same time each reflecting their own writing tendencies and habits and styles. It is easy to brush off flash fiction as not worth bothering with, but I can see it’s taken seriously by you and your team. Remember the classic triad of goals, stakes and obstacles; one may not think such things matter in a brief story, but they do make all the difference.
Thanks for sharing and have fun with this activity!
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