Review of He Came In Dreams

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I am a 40 year old married mother of two teenage boys. I live for writing, especially romance. Love the happily ever after scenerio. The best thing about writing for me is the ability to lose yourself in your work, and feel as if you've accomplished something great. At the end of the day, that's all that really matters.

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He Came In Dreams

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Kate and Taylor find each other in their dreams
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Review of He Came In Dreams

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Rated: 13+

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Judging by the folder you’ve placed it in, I’m assuming this item was written for the latest GoT that we’re in. Perhaps it would be nice to have the prompt included at the bottom, if there was one. I found this listed in the Online Authors sidebar and thought it looked interesting.

It is indeed interesting, written in a brief and mysterious way that feels like the opening chapter to an exciting romance novel. You’ve left us with plenty of questions to continue on with, and I think it’s a good premise, though perhaps a bit trite and “used before.” But I don’t really read romance or novels in general, so I wouldn’t know. I would suggest placing a scene divider, merely a few centered stars will do, between the shift in perspectives, as we aren’t quite expecting it.

Your words set the scenes well and create the pictures in our minds, with the “flowery purple dress” and the busy city streets contrasting with the countryside in their shared dreams.

I don’t have much to suggest for revision here. It’s a pretty little story, written with elegance and mystique.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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