Hi iKïyå§ama  ,
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What I liked ...
 My mind is buzzing with questions after reading this. But, firstly, let me just say I loved this story. You create mystery and suspense throughout, and I couldn't wait to find out what was behind the door to the room next to the laundry room. I was worried that whatever it was might hurt Benjamin in some way. And, I guess, it did. Only, not in any way I had imagined. The surprise I felt at the end was unexpected and brilliant.
You set up this story so well, with Benjamin obsessing over what might be behind the door. His father is evasive and gives a cryptic answer that isn't really an answer. His mother, when he asks her, denies the door even exists. What could possibly be behind that door that is so terrible his parents won't allow Benjamin to see it? Well, Benjamin decides to find out. And, I think it's fair to say, he soon wishes he didn't. In this room, a workshop / laboratory, his father is making robot Benjamins, inspired by Frankenstein's monster, I believe. Because Benjamin died when he was hit by a drunk driver. What I wasn't sure about was whether this Benjamin was the real Benjamin, patched back together, or if he, too, was some kind of robot. I am still not sure.
The affections both parents show Benjamin is lovely, especially his father. The older man ruffles his hair and pats his head showing the tenderness and love he has for his son. His mother kisses his forehead after tucking him into bed. When you haven't read to the end of the story, these three could be any happy family. Which makes the ending even more jarring.
Benjamin, himself, is cute. In particular, I love this: "'Guess, we have to go investigate this, Captain Dooley,' he whispered to his favorite toy action-figure." It is so natural. I could imagine this little boy padding downstairs, clutching his favourite toy. In all innocence, the excitement he felt must have been immense.
Suggestions: I have nothing to add in terms of plot or characters. I just have one typo to mention: "What door across the basement, honey?" I think this should be, "across from the basement."
Parting comments: What a great story, Kiya, with a fantastic reveal. I never would have guessed what lay behind the infamous door. A really enjoyable story!
Choconut
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Kiya is a young woman with many interests. She's got a degree in Computer Science and Registered Nursing.
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