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A beautiful representation of your personal writing process: enclosed, quiet and alone with your thoughts and dreams, to capture them on the pages like so many fluttering butterflies.
I like how it's structured, with carefully balanced line lengths drawing us smoothly through the free flowing verses to the conclusion.
I can identify with this, as I find I write best in a quiet place by myself... But I suppose everyone does - though there are those who write things while sitting at Starbucks. Goodness, I'd be so busy people watching and listening to the ambient music, I wouldn't be able to write a thing I'm easily distracted, I suppose. Anything to get away from the noise inside my head, which ultimately only adds to the noise as I fill it with distractions.
Anyway, you have a good personal poem here, rife with colorful metaphors that build in layers and demonstrate what you mean in showing terms, rather than simply saying "I like to write in a locked room by myself!"
And now I'm thinking about Imagine Dragons and their new song Eyes Closed... If you'll allow me to go off on a silly tangent. It's a song where the lead declares "lock me up in a cage! Just throw away the key, don't worry about me - I can do this with my eyes closed..." And I understand that to be his personal struggle with mental health and the consequences of his actions. He wants to be alone to deal with himself, to do battle within his own mind, and that internal battle produces much of the music that we get from his band.
I couldn't help drawing the comparison... I'm not trying to imply that you're saying you go in a room by yourself because of your mental health. It's a simple way to get some peace and quiet to write in, to tap into your innermost thoughts and feelings and lay those out.
Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing
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