Hi Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ  ,
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What I liked ...
 This poem is lovely. I've read it five times now, trying to soak in all the words, and I'm sure I've missed things. It feels like a poem about spirituality and discovering nature and Mother Nature, and finding out that we are connected to nature in a profound way. It is also a very feminine poem. In terms of being written from a feminine perspective, and from having feminine experiences.
I think most women will understand the struggle between who we want to be, who we are, and who our family wants / needs us to be. It's not that we would ever choose to not have them, but sometimes, we lose a little of ourselves along the way. However, in your poem, you discuss a kind of spiritual awakening. Once you have that, once you connect with Mother Earth, you are able to find yourself. At least, I think that's what you are saying.
Technically, I don't think this poem is any set form, and this is absolutely right. You couldn't really write about the open-ness and freedom of spirituality in a poem where all your words and syllables were restricted. You do, however, have the odd internal rhyme, and you have used enjambment wonderfully. I love that little tool, so reading a poem that employs it as well as this one is a pleasure. I also found the poem has a great rhythm. It flows well, and your use of punctuation tells the reader how you want it to be read.
There are a couple of places I have to highlight, simply because I love them. "Hope is renewed, / in a bounty that never before existed." That wonder and awe is captured so nicely. Also, I love the imagery of the, "branches of great oaks and the sweet scent of maple after a pre-spring rain." That whole description is fantastic. Oak trees represent stability and trustworthiness, strength. And those pieces of scent you give us — of rain and maple — place us inside the poem world with you.
Suggestions: I have nothing. I would do nothing to change this.
Parting comments: This is an evocative poem. It (I think) gives a glimpse into your mindset. It's a great tale of a woman's awakening to spirituality and nature. I really enjoyed it.
Choconut
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