Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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We have here a fond description of your Southern US winter home, presumably in Florida. You show us a glimpse into the reminiscences of the classic denizens of old Dixieland, though upon closer inspection, the memories recited by the couple are actually about Scotland, not the US. It’s like a story within a story, arranged in the casual free verse of a poem.
The enjoyment derived from your half-yearly stay down there is evident in phrases like “home away from home” and “A fond farewell,” and we see the lasting friendships formed that transcend the time and distance, to pick up where they left off next winter… though there is always the worry that they may no longer be around. Gentle whimsy is provided by the big old word “octogenarian,” and I love the charming anecdote about the Scottish New Year’s traditions.
I might suggest including a line count within the item, but it’s not a big deal. Your formatting is excellent, and the lines flow freely along in a conversational manner.
Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing 
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