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A quietly contemplative free verse poem centering around the narrator’s encounter with a burial in the drizzling rain.
The scene is painted with truly poetic clarity: the folded umbrellas signifying the people’s obliviousness to the rain in their grieving, the white balloons indicating the passing of a child, the mother and girl standing separately, the poignant questions that arise as one views the scene. All is laid out in large, clear font, with the narrator’s internal questions separating the different observations into groups.
The free verse flows conversationally, and we feel like participants in the moment, standing in the cool damp, sharing the grief with everyone and wondering why such tragedies take place and how to move on. I especially appreciate the opening and closing repetition, with a touch of rhyme at the end; it reminds me of the great poetry of old, none of which I can particularly remember at the moment…”For Whom the Bell Tolls” or something.
Overall it is a striking, memorable poem, and I have no suggestions for improvement.
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