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Ah, a poem! I love poetry, especially simple nature poems that have a lot of meaning packed into them.
Formatting first⌠youâve left this poem quite small and unimpressive on the page. Perhaps it would look more âpoeticâ if it were centered, with larger font size and maybe even a color. And we know that a dropnote for your thoughts is a nice tidy idea.
I love the concepts youâve arranged here, contemplating three different types of birds and comparing them to the variety of human personalities. We see the sparrows, plain on the outside but soaring to surprising heights and nesting in far off nooks and crannies. We see the ravens, and are somewhat unsure about how exactly they âconjure rainbowsâŚâ is it a biblical metaphor? A reference to rain and shadows? A reference to how purportedly bright the Corvid family of birds is? We move on to the next line and see swans, with their monogamous relationships, and the conclusion drawn that these three are âlike us.â Yet there are so many more birds, beautiful and diverse, and there is much more to humanity than simply these three elements.
Yet, this is a charming and simple poem. I donât have anything to offer for advice because Iâm quite laidback when it comes to poetry. I view it as a highly subjective art form and pretty much anything goes, as long as one puts oneâs heart into it.
Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing 
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