Hello, Purple Princess!

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
Wow! You wrote a complete family-themed flash fiction story in only three hundred words.

You kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

You wrote this family-themed flash fiction story so well that I imagined you'd lived it. I hope that's not the case. It's so very sad. My heart goes out to everyone dealing with diseases that affect memory and everyone who cares for them.

You engaged my emotions as I read this flash fiction story of yours. By the end, I felt very sad. But it inspired me to pray for you and your family and everyone dealing with diseases that affect memory and everyone who cares for them, so that's good (the prayer.. not that anyone has to deal with this).

If you're wondering why I picked your story to review today, it's because yours was the post before mine this week in "I Write in 2024." I also noticed that it's your Writing.Com anniversary month so wanted to take the opportunity to wish you a happy anniversary! I hope you are having a wonderful celebration time here!

You made good use of the prompt in your flash fiction story, even using it as a suspense item.

I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your family-themed flash fiction story.

I thought the family and experience genres you selected were perfect for this family-themed flash fiction story of yours.


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
I would love to have something great to share here, but I think it's a strong family-themed flash fiction story as it is. Well done!

Not related to your writing, but more of a tip in case you want to win the contest (I think you entered this story in the Daily Flash Fiction Contest?, if that's not the case, just skip on down to the next section). I encourage you to read the Daily Flash Fiction main forum page. I think this is a great story, but the person who judges it prefers not to read sad stories. So you have a better chance of winning if you go in a different direction. I haven't read the page in a while, so that may have changed, but I intend to take my own advice and read it again before submitting my next story, just to be safe.


CONCLUSION:
You have a great writing style and I enjoyed reading your family-themed flash fiction story.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, spirit, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler













Positive Hearts
A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .