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About This Author
 Born in the mountains. Raised by gypsies. Lived in 11 cities in 9 states. Wife. Mother. Prefer to spend my time writing fantasy, supernatural, maybe some sci fi if I can get away with it, horror, comedy for sketch, standup, monologue, short stories. Oh, and I really, really, really love to read. I perform improv and standup because someone smarter than me said it would help make my writing better. I hope you find my brain worlds entertaining.
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 Review #4753298 |
 | The Castle Wakes  [18+] A lonely castle holds a dark purpose, inspired by actual events. 2019 Quill Award Nominee!  |
| (4.5)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Invalid Item"   First Impressions: The fact that this story was inspired by actual events makes it all the more creepy. I can imagine if there was an actual gate to hell anywhere, and it had been kept shut for a long time, that events such as these might have opened it again. The backstory was quite scary and well told with very vivid descriptions that made it easy for readers to imagine the scene. But what followed, both in the tavern and afterwards, was equally frightening. It was difficult to feel bad for the main character because of who he was, even when he saw the most horrific things and in the end got torn apart by the hellish beasts. The barkeeper didn’t seem particularly concerned about any of it, despite the obvious risk to himself and his fellow townspeople if the gate was once again open. Perhaps he figured that the creatures that came through it would pick off the evil people first before the villagers were in any danger.  Suggestions: I noticed a few minor errors: Have you heard it’s snores? It should be “its” without the apostrophe, the possessive form of “it”. we call it 'Hölle Tür' I believe it is actually called “das Tor zur Hölle” - the gate to hell. If you want to stick with your name, hell’s door, it should be “Höllentür”. could she could have been arrested The second “could” shouldn’t be there. even in If she had been Again, just an extra word that shouldn’t be there, “in”.  Final Thoughts: It was a very interesting story and you told it well. The setting contributed to the supernatural feel of the tale, with the main character seeing things that made no sense, first the shocking creature in the tavern that vanished as soon as it had chased him into the cold, and then outside when he saw his dead wife among the bodies. The wolves may or may not have been ordinary wolves - that’s what his fellow officers put it down to, anyway - but everything else certainly had a hellish feel to it. A good read!   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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