I am a 40 year old married mother of two teenage boys. I live for writing, especially romance. Love the happily ever after scenerio. The best thing about writing for me is the ability to lose yourself in your work, and feel as if you've accomplished something great. At the end of the day, that's all that really matters.
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Given: May 30, 2024 at 7:33am
Length: 1,811 Characters |
1,383 w/o WritingML
Greetings, Purple OnePride! I am reviewing this because I discovered it on Read & Review. I also just noticed this is your account birthday month! Wow, seventeen years is amazing!
First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.
The Positives/What I Liked
Aw... this is so sweet! I'm thinking you have written it for someone close to your heart. It just breathes love and adoration. As my mouse hovers over the picture of the beautiful young woman, I notice it reads Engagement. How precious! After reading the last stanza, I realize this is about her new chapter in life with someone she loves.
Your title—the same as what you refer to the girl—Sweet Lulu Fair has such a nice ring to it. I absolutely love it!
I'm unfamiliar with this rhyming pattern a/b/c/b d/d/e/b b/b/f/b g/g/h/b, but guess what? It works beautifully! I think it's perfect. This poem flows right along without a hitch. I wouldn't change the pattern one bit.
Suggestions/Comments to Consider
I wouldn't change a thing!
Final Thoughts
This is just the sweetest thing! Thank you for sharing.
Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
Review #4754458
I also just noticed this is your account birthday month! Wow, seventeen years is amazing!
Aw... this is so sweet! I'm thinking you have written it for someone close to your heart. It just breathes love and adoration. 
As my mouse hovers over the picture of the beautiful young woman, I notice it reads Engagement. How precious! After reading the last stanza, I realize this is about her new chapter in life with someone she loves.
Your title—the same as what you refer to the girl—Sweet Lulu Fair has such a nice ring to it. I absolutely love it!
I'm unfamiliar with this rhyming pattern a/b/c/b d/d/e/b b/b/f/b g/g/h/b, but guess what? It works beautifully! I think it's perfect. This poem flows right along without a hitch. I wouldn't change the pattern one bit.
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You responded to this review 05/30/2024 @ 7:36am EDT