 First Impressions:
I didn't expect that ending at all! From the beginning, when it became clear that the main character was a fraud who took vulnerable people’s money, I thought she would either get her comeuppance and someone would expose her in a dramatic or humorous way, or (like in “Ghost”) it would turn out that she really did have a gift and the spirits of the dead would come and visit her. Well, in a way, it seems like she did have a gift after all, only it wasn’t what she had pretended to have all this time.
I liked how you developed the story slowly, making her look like she was just a normal person developing her business and researching her craft, only that it was a scam, but the readers soon forgot about that part. She seemed nice enough, an ordinary person trying to make a living. As it turned out, she wasn’t all that ordinary after all, but not in the way I had expected.
 Suggestions:
The story was nicely written and I only noticed one tiny error:
Why, was this happening now?
I believe you don’t need the comma there.
 Final Thoughts:
The ending was nicely done, and by then you had managed to turn my opinion about her around. It was nice that she was able to use her gift for good, even if that had never been her intention.
I was wondering about the phrase, The time was near, the place was here. You used it in the description and twice in the story, and it sounds like something that should be familiar, like a reference to something or a quote, but it isn’t. It is a fitting description and a great line to use, I just wasn’t sure if I was missing something. I enjoyed the story!
   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!"  .
 You responded to this review 06/02/2024 @ 11:12am EDT |
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