My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE STORY
Ryan is on opposite shifts with his wife and turns to A.I. for some companionship. It could only go bad, right?
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the ending. Ryan's got something to hide with A.I. but the ending kinda teaches him a lesson in a good way.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the third person from Ryan's perspective. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.
DIALOGUE
The dialogue comes in at the end and accents the narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.
DESCRIPTIONS
There's enough to set the scenes. I liked the description of Gal Pal A.I. "She'll always remember your birthday and you'll never have to fret about forgetting your anniversary." She sounds like the perfect Chat A.I. The description is lighthearted and a bit tongue-in-cheek, but it's something that could happen these days.
SETTING
TIME: modern day
PLACE: Ryan's home
This is something that is clarified for the reader.
CHARACTERS
Ryan
Even though he's married, working opposite shifts takes a toll on him. He's easy to like and sympathize with.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening engages the readers and keeps them reading. The story has a great conversational tone to it which makes the reading fun. A lighthearted story that will bring a smile to your face.
Review #4759903
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE STORY
WHAT I LIKED
POV NARRATION/TENSE
You responded to this review 07/02/2024 @ 7:05pm EDT