 Greetings, iKïyå§ama! I am reviewing this because I discovered it oon Read & Review.  I could not pass this up. 
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 The Positives/What I Liked
 This heart-felt piece is such a wonderful tribute to your father. You wrote this before his death, then noted his death at the bottom of the window. I think it was lovely that you noted he had died, though painful, I am sure.
 I love how you began each of the seven-line five stanzas with: A stubborn mule he has been called, It made me smile. And aren't all fathers stubborn mules?  Few will differ, I am sure! Our daddies are special to us daughters, flaws and all. It sounds like you had a wonderful relationship with yours.
 You describe his complaints, his unshakable pride, his values...all so lovingly. I think my favorite lines are:
'Many hardships might come your way, and you will cry along the way
'But you will make it through, you'll see, because I have all my faith in you.'
 Your daddy loved you, that is for certain. This is such a nice tribute to him, Kiya. It brought tears to my eyes.
Suggestions/Comments to Consider
Stanze 2, Line 7: sitting on father's lap  sitting on Father's lap or sitting on my father's lap
Final Thoughts
It's so obvious how much you thought of your father. You must've been a very special daughter to him. Thank you for sharing!
Have a great day and...
K e e p on W r i t i n g !
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Kiya is a young woman with many interests. She's got a degree in Computer Science and Registered Nursing.
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