 
 My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
 THE POEM
The poem was about a muse who needs to finds some notes.
 WHAT I LIKED
Nice expression using a good economy of words. There's a lot that's implied here due to the structure so it requires a bit of critical thinking. I love 'stuff' that makes me pause and think.
 STRUCTURE
This is a poem is a cinquain. The author explains the form - the poem contains 22 syllables, 5 lines, with a 2, 4. 6, 8, 2 syllable scheme.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. My only suggestion would be to increase the font to make it easier on the eyes.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Your dreams are moon-shadow and mist" Honestly, this line gives the reader pause. What is moon-shadow? Mist? Moon-shadows deepen an already dark sky. Mist is light and airy and gone in a second. These arrive, linger, and yet can be fleeting causing frustration.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening offers a simple invite - "you sing." What do you sing? Keeps the reader reading and wanting to find out more. The title is a nice hit for what to expect with the poem. Succinct and thought provoking.
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