Hi Max,

This is a wonderful review. The title is direct and to the point. The reader knows exactly what they will be getting out of the review. Anyone looking to find a movie to watch will begin to read immediately to find out more. I am left with watching movies on television in order so decide whether or not I want to watch them since going to the theater is too expensive, so I began anxiously to read. You launch into the review without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the review. They will read to the last word. You have written a review of the movie "The Master". I am not sure if you were just writing a review or trying to promote the movie to your reader, but, from the review, this movie comes across as rather confusing. I have learned to see things for myself before making a determination, so I will probably watch it if it ends up on television. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the review tedious. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)only sixteen and he abandons her.-There should be a comma after "sixteen".

You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.