Hello, Write-fully Loti!
INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
I enjoyed reading your nature poem about butterflies.
Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.
MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:
Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting.
I liked your description. Butterflies do provide happiness for me too. I love watching them dance about the park gardens.
I wondered if this was a form poem? The shape felt like a form poem, but it read like a free verse poem, at least to me.
My favorite line was: "A glory of simple happiness" because I loved it and it felt like a nice summary of the experience of watching a butterfly.
You shared some lovely images in your poem. I could picture the butterflies on sunlight paths, dancing and swirling in the sunlight.
I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your poem about butterflies.
I thought the nature genre you selected was perfect for this poem about butterflies of yours.
IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
I would love to have something great to share here, but I think it's wonderful as it is. Well done!
CONCLUSION:
I enjoyed reading your nature poem about butterflies.
Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, observations, and writing with the Writing.Com community!
Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!
May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler
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