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Given: Sep 6, 2024 at 1:52pm
Length: 1,290 Characters |
1,092 w/o WritingML
Hi, Amethyst!
This was a great and interesting story about two scientists working together to create a cure for global warming. You characters were believable and the story had a humorous tone to while keeping it serious also. Well done.
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The story was great, you added a conflict and resolution in only 300 words which was easy to understand. I enjoyed reading through it in its entirety.
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You do have one typo in the sentences that says, "But, sirs—" I assume this was meant to say "sir."
The only other suggestion I have would be to name the characters more often, particularly in the last section of the story. There two male scientists, but a lot of sentences say "he," and do not specify which person is talking or doing the act. I had to read the ending a few times to understand who was doing what.
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Overall, this was a short and fun read! I liked how you included that one of the scientists is younger and still learning. It felt realistic but also down-to-earth and funny to read. Great job!
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