An Angel Army Review
Hi WakeUpAndLive️~Happiness  .
I'm JACE  , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "A huge step into the unknown at WdC"  .
I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.
 Overall Impression. This is Review #2 of three. I wanted to find something of a more personal nature to review. Obviously, I found a folder with such items.
A bit of background on me. I took one creative writing course in college several decades ago. The topic was Essays. I learned about Argumenative, essays, Descriptive essays, Expository essays and my favorite Narrative (or Personal) essays. You can search Google for the definitions of these essays.
Personal essays are the real window into a person. Writing about a specific event in one's life is definitely a Personal essay. You chose to write about your participation in the Rising Stars program. I too was a Rising Star, selected as such by Jeff. Imagine my surprise that I, barely a Black case, was selected by a Moderator (at that time).
I'm sure your experience was as heady as mine. What an honor to be chosen to take part in such a great program, to learn from established members about the site itself and writing, in general.
I am continually amazed at the number of dual- and multi-language writers here. I have enough problems with my primary language of English. You have an amazing amount of courage to put yourself out there in another language. Well done. I know enough French, German, and Spanish to order my meal, get directions and count to twenty. Then I'm lost.
Your excitement and anticipation about what to expect in the coming months is well written. I had much contact with both Gabriella45 and Acme in my early years. I can only hope your interaction with Acme was as positive.
You didn't come back and add a note as to how your experience was, so I can only hope you received a lot of benefit from the program.
I especially enjoyed your opening quote to your essay. Having an anchor to tie the subject of your essay to is a good thing. And the same with the ending.
 Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.
You first wrote this essay in 2016, and modified it at least once, if not several times, over the next six years. I can say your grammar, syntax, and spelling have obviously improved. I found no issues with your writing.
 My Rating. 5.0.
 Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.
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