"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Dance Party Raid




Hello, TJ ~ HiLo Silver - Away / aka: callmetj!

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

I enjoyed reading your nature poem about a coming storm.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I saw this poem of yours featured in today's Writing.Com SuperPower Reviewers' Dance Party Raid. I enjoyed it, so decided to give you a review. I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging.

I thought your poem was very dramatic and fun to read.

I thought the end was funny and a perfect closure to this nature poem of yours.

I loved your rhyming, and that the lines were of similar lengths. It made your poem feel balanced and rhythmic.

I have had the experience of being snowed in like you've described in this stormy nature poem of yours, though I was a kid or young adult for those occasions so they seemed fun and exciting to me at the time. At least, until I had to help with the shoveling.

I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes in your stormy nature poem.

I thought the nature genre you selected was perfect for this stormy nature poem of yours.


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
In the spirit of helpfulness, I have two little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section.

Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!

This has nothing to do with your writing, but you might garner more readers for this nature poem of yours if you added an additional genre selection. Also changing "other" to something people are more likely to search for might help too. Nature is a great choice, obviously, but I thought comedy would be an appropriate and nice additional genre. If this has an element of truth from your life you could also add biographical or personal or experience. We can have up to three genres, so I like to choose three whenever it's reasonable to do so.

Even easier, should you decide to do it, would be to take out the extra line space between the second and third stanzas. The editor in me notices little things like that. Probably other people wouldn't though.

As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't.

CONCLUSION:

I enjoyed reading your stormy nature poem, and appreciated the whole thing, the ending especially.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler












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