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Hello, Marilyn Mackenzie, aka: Kenzie!

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

Your poem paints a beautiful example of what I presume to be your Christian baptism.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I saw this "Tears of Grace" poem of yours featured in today's Writing.Com SuperPower Reviewers' Dance Party Raid. I enjoyed it, so decided to give you a review. I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging.

Wow, what a lovely experience. I am not sure if this was your personal experience, or if you fictionalized one, or shared someone else's but I loved it. Truly, when we have the Lord in our hearts, we are never alone. His Spirit is with us and we are always covered by His grace.

I thought the blue font worked well with the water of baptism theme of your "Tears of Grace" poem.

My favorite part was the second to last stanza. It seems like a totally surreal and maybe paranormal experience, but all things are possible with God. I got chills when reading it and thought that it must have been an amazing experience and connection with the Lord, if it were true and not fiction. Even if it were fiction, it was really nice to read about.

Reading your poem reminded me to pray for you and your family, so I paused this review to do so. May our Lord heal, bless, encourage and provide for you all.

I didn't notice any spelling mistakes in your "Tears of Grace" poem.

I loved that this poem of yours has already received fourteen reviews, averaging five stars. I'll be awarding it five stars too, because it's truly lovely.


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
In the spirit of helpfulness, I have two little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section.

Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!

The first, I think, is just a typo. In this sentence, I think there's a missing end quotation mark. Right now, it looks like this:
She disappears beneath the water, then emerges
To hear, “In the name of the Father, and the Son
And the Holy Spirit, Amen.

If you added the end quote, it would look like this:
She disappears beneath the water, then emerges
To hear, “In the name of the Father, and the Son
And the Holy Spirit, Amen."

This has nothing do with your writing, but is about the genres. Right now, just "other" is selected. I don't think anyone selects or searches by "other." So, I'd recommend picking something other than that and using your other two options to have a total of three genres selected. Potential genres that come to mind for me for this poem of yours include: inspirational, religious, spiritual, personal, biographical, and experience. I think any of these could work, so whatever three you liked best would be a great set of choices.

As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't.

CONCLUSION:
I enjoyed reading your lovely poem, and wish you much joy and grace in your walk with the Lord.

Thank you for sharing your faith, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler












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