Hi Purple Holiday Givings

I'm sending this review in connection with "I Write in 2024" .


Positives

You did a great job with the setting and the basic narrative in this story. 300-word flash fiction stories can be really tough to tell completely without resorting to something that's more along the lines of a vignette, but you managed to give this story the feeling of a much fuller tale that could be told if you were interested in expanding the word count. It's not easy to make a story this short seem like that's possible, so I thought you did a great job with that aspect of it.


Suggestions

I would have loved for the limited dialogue to give just a bit more context for why Chris and Tiffany were making out in a corn maze that everyone (including Andi) was participating in. Did they know Andi was with them and were just taking an unnecessary risk? Did Andi come separately and just happen to be there? I think a little added context about the character motivations and which character character knew what would help smooth over that bit of the story.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this Daily Flash Fiction Challenge entry. Well done!


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Jeff
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