Greetings and happy holidays!
I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 project.
I love your take on the theme, remembering a precious moment where everything fell into place perfectly for an unforgettable experience. (I need to inform you, as a dedicated weather nerd, the word is "cirrus...")
Other than that, I have nothing to suggest here. The flow is conversational and engaging, without the possibility of being too trite if it had rhymes. That moment of stunning beauty as we see the whale, a perfect ending to a lovely evening, is built up to in a splendid way. You begin with the setting, painting us the sunset and the reflection in the sea, and the ending reiterates this in the phrase "a sea of magenta sky."
This would make a gorgeous painting... I might try prompting my favorite AI art generator with words inspired by your poem and see how it goes  Say, would you like me to send you one of the resulting images to use as the cover art for this item? Let me know if I'm overstepping with this idea! 
Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing 
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 You responded to this review 12/11/2024 @ 11:44am EST |
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