Hi Fyn
I discovered your item on Writing.com via random
Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.
Positives
I really liked the structure and the format of this piece. It was well, written, entertaining, and told a great story. Well done!
Suggestions
No specific suggestions for improvement.
Overall
Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. Although that's no surprise when it comes to your poetry!
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Sincerely,
Jeff
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