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 | Somewhere Out There  [E] On the other side of the rainbow is...  |
| (4.5)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Hello, Angel bunny Easter eggs galore, aka dragonfish! INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:  I enjoyed reading your "Somewhere Out There" poem every time I read it, including today. Your poem's message was a lovely one of hope for a better life for everyone and a unified community. Congratulations to you on completing eight whole years of the Contest Challenge! "The Contest Challenge" MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:  Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I read this "Somewhere Out There" poem of yours sometime in the past and enjoyed it, but didn't have time to review it right then, so I flagged it for an anniversary review (meaning I saved the link to it in a special "April" file.  ). I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging. It is meant to be honest and respectful, in accordance with WDC guidelines. I liked how you zoomed out beyond what we can see, far into unexplored worlds, and seem to have applied your kind wishes to everything beyond us and including us. The wishes conveyed in the end of your poem were beautiful and inspiring to read. I am guessing that this is a free-verse style of poetry, as I don't detect a specific form. My favorite stanza was the last one, with the last three lines being my favorite lines. As one of just nine people on this site to have completed eight years of Jody's Contest Challenge, you are part of an elite group of achievers! I hope you own that and that it helps you feel like you can accomplish anything. I wondered if this was a school assignment, something you wrote for a contest or challenge here, or something you wrote just for the fun of it. I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your "Somewhere Out There" poem. I thought the travel genre you selected for this poem was an okay match for it.IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have some little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section. Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!   I know free verse has a lot of leeway, and I love that part of it, but this felt more like you wrote three sentences arranged in poetic form (rather than an actual poem). The words are great, but it just felt more like a monologue than a poem to me. The message is great. It's just that I think a monologue form would be more fitting in this particular instance. I'm not an expert though, just sharing my opinion. The "other" genre isn't likely to net you more future readers, as I don't think anyone searches for that. I'd recommend choosing a different genre, and really three, as we are allowed three, and people do search by genre here. Perhaps "fantasy," "inspirational," "spiritual," "personal," or "scientific" might be nice options to consider? There's a drop down list, as you know, because you had to use it to select “other". I don't have it memorized; those are just some suggestions. The actual list will probably be more helpful. Just to show it's not only me who recommends this, moderator Schnujo's Giving Away GPs  shared on the news feed in a comment on 2/21/2025 that “SM has told me, himself, that the #1 way people search for things to read on WdC is through the genre search, so if you aren't filling out all 3 genres, you are literally missing out on readers.” [On the very slim chance that you don't already know this, SM is our StoryMaster here, and definitely in the know.] If you want to see the note and scroll down to see her whole comment, here’s the link: "Note: View this Note". It's always nice for me as a reader to have the poetry form and line count listed below the poem, perhaps in a "notes" section. I don't know how long it took me to start doing that, but once I did, readers responded favorably. So I'd recommend adding that information beneath your poem. It might help you get more future readers if you added a thumbnail picture to your story, if your membership level allows that. Pictures are attention getting and could help your story stand out in a list of search results.As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't. CONCLUSION:  I enjoyed reading your "Somewhere Out There" poem, and empathized with your sentiments that you expressed in it. Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community! Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance, and may the Lord bless you and all that you do, during your anniversary month, and always! PWheeler   A SuperPower Reviewers Choice review!  Positive Hearts  A Review from: "Invalid Item"  The B.E.A.R. Fund  ROAR   A Review to Congratulate You on Completing 8 Years of the Contest Challenge!: "The Contest Challenge"   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/13/2025 @ 9:15pm EDT